Jan 7, 2010

And It Rained...

The park was deserted except for the girl in bridal finery who sat in the corner, a faraway look in her eyes, a palm clenched tight. Twilight had given way to twinkling stars. The moon spread its luminescent glow over the landscape as the gentle breeze caressed her cheek like a lover. But the turmoil in her mind refused to subside. She sat still, waiting, what for, she knew not.

Scenes after scenes flashed across her eyes. She dressed up radiating happiness, the shrill ring of the phone, the stiff voice of the caller, her race to the house, gathering of people, whisperings dying on her arrival, the wait, arrival of the ambulance, the body shrouded in white laid down on the cold ground, his boyish face uncovered - smiling even in death.

She had sat through the rites in stony silence, no tears in her eyes. After the rites, she had slowly walked away from the crowd. Her legs moved on their own and she found herself in the park, a place where they spent time, talking, arguing, building their dream nest. She opened her palms, the little vial beckoning her.

A whining sound broke her reverie. She turned towards the sound. A little pup was trying to snuggle upto to its mother, who lay motionless. All her bottled emotions erupted as rivulets of tears streamed across her cheeks. She lay on the ground crying her heart out.

Slowly she walked towards the pup and picked it. He struggled to get out of her grasp but she held, firmly but gently. Her hand caressed her stomach feeling the life growing inside her “Forever together” she whispered to the two lives she carried and walked out of the park. The first drop of rain splattered on her head. She looked heavenwards and smiled.

Even the Gods approved.

11 comments:

IdleMind said...

Voila! this was a godsend post too!! in this age of so much desperation, this story calms down nerves ... indeed a heartwarming read.

Btw, I request you to read this - http://timesofindia.indiatimes.com/india/Love-triumphs-26/11-bullets/articleshow/5422142.cms.

Happy New Year to you!!

Tongue Trip said...

hey so good to see youre back to posting and how! beautiful wrap up. each word is so visual, like i just watched it all happen. dont be gone too long again.
:)cheers..ta

Gyanban said...

Poignant post to being the year...well articulated,I liked the build up.!

Nikki... said...

@ TT : Thank you so much.. Will not give the excuse of no time, but I guess I become a bit lazy sometimes :)

Nikki... said...

@Gyanban - Thank you for your encouraging words.. Am glad you liked it.. am not too much of a story teller :)

magiceye said...

wow! powerful! brilliant narration

Vittaldas Prabhu said...

This story is about hope, letting-go and fighting for survival. You have brought in nice contrasts between different things to bring out the message hidden in the story. A thoroughly enjoyable read.

Brosreview said...

I agree with Vittaldas. There is good imagery created here. I liked it. If I may, I request you to visit my spot and read the song, "Forgive to Forget". I have a feeling you will like it. Thanks in advance.

Keep up with the good work!

Nikki... said...

@Idle : Thanks idle.. for your words and the lovely article :)

@magiceye : Thank you :)

@Vittal : Thank you.. How well you describe the gist of the story :)

@BR : Thank you so much.. Will surely read it and I am sure I will like it :)

the-silhouette said...

Mannn....that was a beauty...from the very beginning i was trying to figure out the end, which came out completely different than i anticipated...like i said, simply beautiful...

Regards,
The Silhouette...

Nikki... said...

@ The Silhouette - Thank you so much.. am glad that you liked it :)